Callie mum Posted October 21, 2014 Share Posted October 21, 2014 Hi, My EOI has been submitted and now I would appreciate any advice or tips on writng a good commitment letter please, I know from previous threads to definately not to copy and paste from any sites ( which I wouldn't do anyway ) I just want to write a good letter as this move would mean the world to me and my family. Thanks Callie x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest The Pom Queen Posted October 22, 2014 Share Posted October 22, 2014 Where are you heading Callie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Callie mum Posted October 22, 2014 Author Share Posted October 22, 2014 Northern Territory, just want to know how to begin the letter and should I list the websites I've researched for jobs, housing, cost of living, schooling, this site etc? What are the key things they want to hear? Thanks Callie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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kevsan Posted November 10, 2014 Share Posted November 10, 2014 Hi Callie. I dumped out the bulk of the letter we submitted for Victoria State Sponsorship, if it helps. I've stripped out some of the details but should give you an idea of what we included... You could argue that we laid it on a bit thick, but it is all true and heartfelt. We thought that it should clearly demonstrate that you are serious, have put in some work and have thought it through. I included about 5 jobs, and effectively applied for each one... showing the skills and how i would meet them, and included website screenshots to demonstrate that they were legit jobs i felt i could apply for. Feel free to use the theme/style, but obv it needs to be your own words and feelings. FWIW, it took 8 working days for us to get sponsorship after we applied. Maybe this letter helped... Start: This letter includes: 1) Our reasons for myself and my family wanting to apply to live and work in Melbourne Victoria. 2) A table of current suitable roles available, with an explanation of how my skills fit. Along with this I have included screen shots of the roles, as advertised on the jobsites and a link to said jobsites. In 2007, my wife and I (now married for 3 years) stayed with friends in Melbourne. We soaked up the atmosphere in the city, admiring the different cultures, the excellent food, the historic and modern parts of the city. It felt like ‘home’. There aren’t many cities, out of the ones we’ve visited in the world, that feel as clean, refreshing and welcoming as Melbourne. We want to make it our home city. We spent some time on the Great Ocean Road. What a breathtaking place to be! We were blessed to see the sights and excited to spot some very special wildlife. We also went in the other direction and spent time on the Mornington Peninsula. We often looked at the suburbs and talked about what it would be like to make it our home. We asked our friends what it was like living back in Melbourne, compared to the UK. There were many differences and some similarities, all of which attracted us to Melbourne. When we went back to England we knew we wanted to come back to Melbourne at some point and explore more of Victoria. However, coming back for merely a visit was not going to be enough for us. We tentatively explored the idea of emigrating. A few years have passed, we have had our two beautiful children and the dream of returning to Melbourne has never died. Now especially we want to see our Children grow up in an environment of adventure and culture and give them the best chance in life. As well as going through all the necessary processes to apply for our visa, we are also continuously looking at our future in Victoria with regards to jobs, houses and schools. My current employer, has offices in Melbourne. I have had initial discussions about potential relocation but most openings require citizens only due to security restrictions. However, I have been encouraged to revisit this upon a successful visa. Whilst in the UK, in the midst of the economic downturn I have continued in my current employment, and have even been headhunted from a number of companies. In all these discussions I have looked at the viability of working for them within Australia and specifically Victoria. I am currently in advanced negotiations with XXXX for a new role with them. They also have offices across Australia with their Australian headquarters in Melbourne. If successful this could open opportunities to transfer to this office as well if a PR visa was granted. I have had a conversation with a previous colleague who has successfully migrated to Brisbane. He was keen to pursue me into a role in his current organisation in Redland that he was recruiting for. I had to decline due to us wanting to migrate to Victoria and nowhere else. On the following page is a screen shot of the communications from this previous colleague as proof of his interest: screenie. Since our previous application (end of November 2013), I have continued to monitor jobs and opportunities within Victoria. I am a member of a number of Australian based groups within Linkedin including; XXXX I also follow a number of companies that are actively recruiting within Australia including PWC, ANZ Bank, and Telstra. As an example of the positions currently being recruited to, I have picked five roles which interested me and which I would apply for if I was in a position to. For each role I have explained my suitability. Please find this information on the next few pages: I then had a table of jobs in the format: [TABLE=width: 99%] [TR] [TD]Employer: XXXX[/TD] [TD]Role:XXXXX[/TD] [TD]How my skills apply to each role and why I would be a suitable candidate: [/TD] [/TR] [/TABLE] I am also a member of the pomsinoz forum and have had some conversations with a number of recruiters who have jobs advertised that I was a viable candidate for, if a PR visa had been secured at the time. I am looking forward to exploring job opportunities in my area of expertise and whilst I am always aware of the ever increasing changes in economies, I am positive around the future opportunities. An article from the Sydney Morning Herald in May outlining that the Australian Job Market is showing signs of strength and growth seems to reinforce this. I also continued with my professional development, renewing my XXXX certification and have now passed my exams and am a certified XXXXX. My wife is also looking forward to exploring employment opportunities for herself. We feel her role, when we set foot on Australian soil, will be to settle our children into school and life before she explores employment but contributing her skills and work experience in some way is high on her agenda. She has had success in a number of Senior Administration roles with employers such as local government, a city university and currently our local church. We have also explored where we would like to live. Our friends live in Seaford and we would want to look at somewhere near here, taking full advantage of the rail link into Melbourne City for commuting and leisure purposes. We would like to give our children the opportunity to be near the sea if we can. We will rent for a while to make sure we are all settled into the area, before hopefully being in a position to buy our future home. We have already started to look on the following websites for an idea of what we could rent and/or purchase: XXXX We have acquaintances that live in Brisbane and Perth, who we may consider contacting to visit once we are settled in Melbourne but not once in our discussions as a family, has there been a sway to either of these locations. It has always been Melbourne. If it isn’t Melbourne it isn't anywhere. And, of course, we would be foolish not to visit other parts of Australia but this would be as ‘holidays’ and we would always want to come home to Melbourne. We would also look to have our friends and family in the UK come to visit us. We’re looking forward to showing them the sites! I hope this has given you an indication of our passion and ambition to live in Melbourne. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Callie mum Posted November 11, 2014 Author Share Posted November 11, 2014 Thank you for that it's just what I needed, I now have a good idea where to begin Callie x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steven Kilvington Posted November 11, 2014 Share Posted November 11, 2014 Hi Callie. I dumped out the bulk of the letter we submitted for Victoria State Sponsorship, if it helps. I've stripped out some of the details but should give you an idea of what we included... You could argue that we laid it on a bit thick, but it is all true and heartfelt. We thought that it should clearly demonstrate that you are serious, have put in some work and have thought it through. I included about 5 jobs, and effectively applied for each one... showing the skills and how i would meet them, and included website screenshots to demonstrate that they were legit jobs i felt i could apply for. Feel free to use the theme/style, but obv it needs to be your own words and feelings. FWIW, it took 8 working days for us to get sponsorship after we applied. Maybe this letter helped... Start: This letter includes: 1) Our reasons for myself and my family wanting to apply to live and work in Melbourne Victoria. 2) A table of current suitable roles available, with an explanation of how my skills fit. Along with this I have included screen shots of the roles, as advertised on the jobsites and a link to said jobsites. In 2007, my wife and I (now married for 3 years) stayed with friends in Melbourne. We soaked up the atmosphere in the city, admiring the different cultures, the excellent food, the historic and modern parts of the city. It felt like ‘home’. There aren’t many cities, out of the ones we’ve visited in the world, that feel as clean, refreshing and welcoming as Melbourne. We want to make it our home city. We spent some time on the Great Ocean Road. What a breathtaking place to be! We were blessed to see the sights and excited to spot some very special wildlife. We also went in the other direction and spent time on the Mornington Peninsula. We often looked at the suburbs and talked about what it would be like to make it our home. We asked our friends what it was like living back in Melbourne, compared to the UK. There were many differences and some similarities, all of which attracted us to Melbourne. When we went back to England we knew we wanted to come back to Melbourne at some point and explore more of Victoria. However, coming back for merely a visit was not going to be enough for us. We tentatively explored the idea of emigrating. A few years have passed, we have had our two beautiful children and the dream of returning to Melbourne has never died. Now especially we want to see our Children grow up in an environment of adventure and culture and give them the best chance in life. As well as going through all the necessary processes to apply for our visa, we are also continuously looking at our future in Victoria with regards to jobs, houses and schools. My current employer, has offices in Melbourne. I have had initial discussions about potential relocation but most openings require citizens only due to security restrictions. However, I have been encouraged to revisit this upon a successful visa. Whilst in the UK, in the midst of the economic downturn I have continued in my current employment, and have even been headhunted from a number of companies. In all these discussions I have looked at the viability of working for them within Australia and specifically Victoria. I am currently in advanced negotiations with XXXX for a new role with them. They also have offices across Australia with their Australian headquarters in Melbourne. If successful this could open opportunities to transfer to this office as well if a PR visa was granted. I have had a conversation with a previous colleague who has successfully migrated to Brisbane. He was keen to pursue me into a role in his current organisation in Redland that he was recruiting for. I had to decline due to us wanting to migrate to Victoria and nowhere else. On the following page is a screen shot of the communications from this previous colleague as proof of his interest: screenie. Since our previous application (end of November 2013), I have continued to monitor jobs and opportunities within Victoria. I am a member of a number of Australian based groups within Linkedin including; XXXX I also follow a number of companies that are actively recruiting within Australia including PWC, ANZ Bank, and Telstra. As an example of the positions currently being recruited to, I have picked five roles which interested me and which I would apply for if I was in a position to. For each role I have explained my suitability. Please find this information on the next few pages: I then had a table of jobs in the format: [TABLE=width: 99%] [TR] [TD]Employer: XXXX[/TD] [TD]Role:XXXXX[/TD] [TD]How my skills apply to each role and why I would be a suitable candidate:[/TD] [/TR] [/TABLE] I am also a member of the pomsinoz forum and have had some conversations with a number of recruiters who have jobs advertised that I was a viable candidate for, if a PR visa had been secured at the time. I am looking forward to exploring job opportunities in my area of expertise and whilst I am always aware of the ever increasing changes in economies, I am positive around the future opportunities. An article from the Sydney Morning Herald in May outlining that the Australian Job Market is showing signs of strength and growth seems to reinforce this. I also continued with my professional development, renewing my XXXX certification and have now passed my exams and am a certified XXXXX. My wife is also looking forward to exploring employment opportunities for herself. We feel her role, when we set foot on Australian soil, will be to settle our children into school and life before she explores employment but contributing her skills and work experience in some way is high on her agenda. She has had success in a number of Senior Administration roles with employers such as local government, a city university and currently our local church. We have also explored where we would like to live. Our friends live in Seaford and we would want to look at somewhere near here, taking full advantage of the rail link into Melbourne City for commuting and leisure purposes. We would like to give our children the opportunity to be near the sea if we can. We will rent for a while to make sure we are all settled into the area, before hopefully being in a position to buy our future home. We have already started to look on the following websites for an idea of what we could rent and/or purchase: XXXX We have acquaintances that live in Brisbane and Perth, who we may consider contacting to visit once we are settled in Melbourne but not once in our discussions as a family, has there been a sway to either of these locations. It has always been Melbourne. If it isn’t Melbourne it isn't anywhere. And, of course, we would be foolish not to visit other parts of Australia but this would be as ‘holidays’ and we would always want to come home to Melbourne. We would also look to have our friends and family in the UK come to visit us. We’re looking forward to showing them the sites! I hope this has given you an indication of our passion and ambition to live in Melbourne. wow, i never even thought of writing a letter, i just wrote along the lines of, job prospects are better, housing cheaper etc this was around 5 lines in an email. Recieved invitation after two weeks. Win! 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saakshisyal Posted April 14, 2015 Share Posted April 14, 2015 Hello there, I have applied for Victoria SS, they have asked for commitment letter because i earlier mentioned that i have friends in other parts of Australia. May I please request you to kindly help me with a sample format of commitment letter to Victoria. I will definitely not use the same words etc but just need to know how to approach, what can be the best lines to strongly commit so that my nomination gets accepted. Please help guys! Thanks much, thanks in advance! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bungo Posted April 14, 2015 Share Posted April 14, 2015 Hello there,I have applied for Victoria SS, they have asked for commitment letter because i earlier mentioned that i have friends in other parts of Australia. May I please request you to kindly help me with a sample format of commitment letter to Victoria. I will definitely not use the same words etc but just need to know how to approach, what can be the best lines to strongly commit so that my nomination gets accepted. Please help guys! Thanks much, thanks in advance! Well personally I think it is better in your own words. Nevertheless there is a perfectly good example on the thread you tagged onto. :wink: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sammy1 Posted April 14, 2015 Share Posted April 14, 2015 I lived in a remote location in the NT for a number of years, It was unlike any place that I had ever lived and no amount of research can prepare you for that. I would recommend that you just speak from the heart, your hopes for your family, you, your partner and your children. Also, why the NT appeals to you and what you know about it. They just want to make sure that people are committed to the NT and will stay. Talk about the areas that you are interested in and what you can as a family contribute to the NT. I know people take these letters too seriously........A little while ago I received a private message on this forum from someone (I did not know), who asked me for my contact details and wanted me to lie and let him use my name,address and phone number for the purpose of showing that there was someone he knew and had connections with in the NT . I ignored the message as I did not particularly want to break the law and I of course did not know him. Good luck with your letter, you are already well on track with what you have written here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Caesar Posted April 17, 2015 Share Posted April 17, 2015 Northern Territory Commitment Statement Can anyone let me know what it means by 'Evidence of research into living & working in NT' and is it same as 'Commitment Statement to Northern Territory?' Thx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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